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Yes, I remember love
And passions roaring flame
The thrill of that first kiss
Desires you cannot tame

I recall the fervor
Love's roller coaster ride
How your heart beats faster
When she stands at your side

So listen when I say
Love to me's no stranger
And this my friend I've learned
She comes with hidden danger

Behold the walking wreck
That holds a broken heart
I was a better man
Till love tore me apart

Her hateful bitter blade
Just stole my world away
Gave it to another
It did no good to pray

They say that time heals wounds
That's such a sinful lie
Her's are scars I'll carry
Until the day I die

So my friend walk wisely
Hearts are easily broken
Before you dance with love
Recall the words I've spoken...
:icongary-thedreamingpoet:
This poem is about the past, it's written drawing on memories and emotions I once experienced, but today I'm fine. :)
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:icondelice1941:
I am never sure if poems of lost love are romantic or sad, perhaps sadly romantic. So readable.
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*Gary-thedreamingpoet Jun 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you :) :heart:
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:iconthepenvsthesword:
It was really good! But I kind of expected "die" to be at the end instead of "day" in the sixth stanza.
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:icongary-thedreamingpoet:
*Gary-thedreamingpoet Jun 26, 2012  Professional Writer
You are absolutely right! Thank you, I must have had a 'senior moment' :rofl:
Thank you :)
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:iconthepenvsthesword:
You're welcome! :D It's ok. Happens to us all.
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:iconmagicaljoey:
You know, if you put a bit more emphasis on meter (Lines one and three being Iambic tetrameter, lines two and four being Iambic hexameter (I think that's what it's called)) you would be great at writing Ballads. Your poems tell such wonderful stories.
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*Gary-thedreamingpoet Jun 26, 2012  Professional Writer
I'm trying hard to improve! :D
And thank you my dear friend :heart:
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~MusesDaughter Jun 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
powerful.
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:icongary-thedreamingpoet:
*Gary-thedreamingpoet Jun 26, 2012  Professional Writer
I guess experience will do that...
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*TheDarkenedBride Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
really strong :heart:
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