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I look into thine eyes
Drown in lakes of wonder
Feel my spirit soaring
Clouds are torn asunder

Golden beams are dancing
Painting skies of blue
Wings that banish misery
Now wear a rainbow hue

Sweet the rising melody
That on heartstrings plays
To chase away past sorrows
And bring a brighter day

Thou art radiant beauty
With sunlight in thy train
Bringing waves of passion
To shatter every chain

To see thy perfect hand
Feel such softness on my cheek
The only pleasing prayer
This humble soul could speak?
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Mood: Love ~River-989 May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is completely beautiful, very well written
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*Gary-thedreamingpoet May 21, 2012  Professional Writer
Then writing it was worthwhile :) :heart:
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~River-989 May 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Agred :)
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:icondelice1941:
Sweet the rising melody, That on heartstrings plays. Lovely lyrical words.
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*Gary-thedreamingpoet Apr 23, 2012  Professional Writer
That means so much to me, thank you :)
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:iconkay-march:
Words can be soft beams of silver and gold and glow on the same way in adoration as much as inspiration... The Moon do love us as we must love Her back.
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*Gary-thedreamingpoet Apr 23, 2012  Professional Writer
:heart:
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~BellaBugia Apr 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I am going to practise my evil critiquing powers on you.

Wonderful imagery in this piece. Your syllable count is a little off in a few places but it seems to still reads well. Your rhymes work well together, also. All in all, a good job.
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*Gary-thedreamingpoet Apr 23, 2012  Professional Writer
Wow! Evil critiquing my ass! You is still kind and lovable :) :heart:
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~BellaBugia Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol I liked it I couldn't really pick fault =P :heart:
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